Mar 11, 2005 08:34 PM
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(Updated Mar 11, 2005 08:34 PM)
Adithya,
Your write up was an interesting one with two nice stories. Though you have made an attempt to urge people to believe in the supernatural, both stories had scope to convince better than they now do.
Another aspect is your grammar. The story keeps going from first to third person - you need to keep consistency in it. You also need to be aware of tense - for example, you say ''he shacked my hands'' - here, there is both a tense error and it should have been ''he shook'' my hands and you spell it wrong. Further, there are several spelling errors too. A suggestion - write it with Microsoft Word that suggests spelling & grammar corrections.
Well, there is nothing else I could possibly add in here; but for the site not accepting any review below 150 words - this is sheer blackmail, I must say. You cannot force someone to write for the heck of it!
Otherwise, I would say, it made a good reading - supernatural stories always do!
Regards,
Ravi
